Green green grass and tree.
Bright light comes in with small heat.
Summer is coming.
Q: with small heat??
Revised version:
Green green grass and trees.
Bright light with a touch of heat.
Summer is coming.
3rd version:
Green green grass and trees
Shining light along with warm wind >> too many words
Summer is coming
3rd version revision:
Green green grass and trees
Shining light and warm wind blow
Summer is coming
Other options for the 2nd line above:
1. Light shines along with warm wind
2. Shining light and warm wind, too
As for Wellington: :D
Rain, cold wind, and waves
Branches rustle, the chill bites
Winter is coming
Comments from Damon:
回覆刪除A couple of small changes.
Line 1: You either need an article - 'a' - in front of 'tree'. Or make that 'tree' into 'trees.
Line 2: You are right to question 'small heat'. I'm not sure what to replace just those two words with.
How about changing the whole line to 'A warm and welcome bright light'?
Or 'Bright light with a touch of heat' Or, try something else if you like...
Vocabulary:
回覆刪除[light heralding summer]， heralding (adj)
*herald (v): to be a sign of something that is going to come or happen soon
*rustle (v): if leaves, papers, clothes etc rustle, or if you rustle them, they make a noise as they rub against each other